angelie del rosario(still working on it)

[gellierenatsume]

Name: Angelie del Rosario

Nickname: gel

Age: 11

Nationality: chi-nay; Chinese-Filipina

Appearance: hair is long; it reaches the back of my knees; it’s color purple. Attire: all black; ninja like. Skin: natural pale color; has a huge scar at my back.

Personality: quite, I do lots of unexpected things.

Alice: can communicate to spirits. Likewise. A shaman
I could unite with spirits and that's not all, I could also make them unite with the things under my possession

History: ever since I was a child, I could see spirits. I usually talk to them that make people around me, think I’m crazy. My family neglected me. They said I was a disgrace to our family and always put them to trouble.
My father started to lose his temper. He started punishing me. I can't help it. One day when he was yelling at me, suddenly something got in to my mind, a spirit unites with me. I just realized what I was doing when I almost killed my parents, even my brother. That’s when I started to live alone.
My spirit friends told me about the academy. At first I doubt of entering, but then I have nowhere else to go to.
(Neglected child) don’t want to talk about this anymore. But they still gave some of their time for me so I guess it won't hurt if tell something.
Mother: Linda; father: mhel; brother: mark.
My mom does care for me; well at least before they found out I’m different. Same for my father. My brother, he always teases me and that’s all I can say

[Headmaster Haru]

My Comments:

First, the common mistake, missing the clothing part in the Appearance Section.

Second, Your personality is quite short and vague. So, explain a bit more on that.

Third, Your history. Although you sounded dangerous, it was again quite vague to be as such. How can you almost kill someone with a spirit fusion alice? Of course, that roots from the description of your alice in the Alice section. Elaborate more on that and everything will be clear and fine.

Fourth, Your typing skills. Please observe proper capitalization and spacing. Arrange them to avoid eye-twirling effects.

[gellierenatsume]

Oh sorry about that. I'll change it right away.

And one more thing, i didn't actually missed the clothing section, it was the attire section.

Oh yeah i forgot. i need to go now, but i'll change it tom. I promise.And I'll provide picture/s for it.